r_shadows 0
r_3dsky 0
r_drawdetailprops 0
r_drawbatchdecals 0
^^^ Type all of these in your console and should improve FPS and quality. Also try rendering in a higher quality and it should come out better.
Regarding the actual montage some of the clips were nice despite the android quality, but try shorten them down and include some civilian shooting. Also i would recommend some better music.