So I'm hoping for an open critique of what I now consider to be the finished version of Act 1 of 3 of my Fallout 4 OCS. I began writing it about two years ago and have been writing and rewriting it on and off ever since.
The link to read what I've written can be found Here. Please bear in mind it's like 38 thousand words so far, (62 pages) so it may take an hour or two to read fully.
Whoever can bring to attention the most typos, poor grammar, story or logical inconsistencies, and give me some real critical opinions on how it's written, etc. will get a £10 steam voucher off me for christmas. Bonus points to anyone who can give me ideas on how to improve it, or make characters more believable, as that's what I believe is where it's lacking most currently.
The link to read what I've written can be found Here. Please bear in mind it's like 38 thousand words so far, (62 pages) so it may take an hour or two to read fully.
Whoever can bring to attention the most typos, poor grammar, story or logical inconsistencies, and give me some real critical opinions on how it's written, etc. will get a £10 steam voucher off me for christmas. Bonus points to anyone who can give me ideas on how to improve it, or make characters more believable, as that's what I believe is where it's lacking most currently.
